In class our teacher gave us a (sick) sentence and we had to improve these sentences. We had to use correct punctuation, added detail, answered questions, paragraphs for different ideas and describe using your senses. Here is mine.
It is night time.
A boy walks on a road.
He sees a figure.
He feels happy.
The big, round, bright, white moon illuminated the streets giving of enough light to see.
A boy walks on a old and run down road, all of the paint marks are no longer viable.
He sees a shodowy figure slowy rise up on the horizon, he seems to be wearing an old baseball cap, a tatered leather jacket, brown trac pants and torn apart sneakers.
He gets fulled with happyins because he hasn’t seen a soul in forever, since the war broke out.
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